Fantasy's Perfection

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Thu Jul 30, 2009 2:55 pm

Very interesting. You have a way for description, props for that. A few sentences sounded wierd but the only one I got right now is "I assumed this was her way of trying to calmly," I think you may have meant "calm me" Other than that I see no grammatical or spelling errors. Very well done. Liked the nice cliff hanger at the end there. Nice touch.

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Thu Jul 30, 2009 4:56 pm

Riolu wrote:: Very interesting. You have a way for description, props for that. A few sentences sounded wierd but the only one I got right now is "I assumed this was her way of trying to calmly," I think you may have meant "calm me" Other than that I see no grammatical or spelling errors. Very well done. Liked the nice cliff hanger at the end there. Nice touch.

Thanks for the compliments and thanks for pointing that out n.n *huggles*

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Thu Jul 30, 2009 6:38 pm

This is pretty good for a first off story. Reminiscent of other ones I've seen but none the less pretty good in it's own right with some nice differences. Good Job. ^^

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Fri Jul 31, 2009 12:07 am

very very cute bwo. I love it great job.

Guest

What is the reason you stopped, Noah? This story is gooooood!

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Thu Aug 20, 2009 10:37 pm

Hector wrote:: What is the reason you stopped, Noah? This story is gooooood!

I didn't stop, I just haven't written a new part yet.

Guest

Would you continue it? Please? *shows cute puppy eyes*

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Fri Aug 21, 2009 11:44 pm

Hector wrote:: Would you continue it? Please? *shows cute puppy eyes*

I will when I can...don't get your hopes up.

Guest

Thanks! *wags tail in excitement*

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Tue Oct 20, 2009 12:05 am

Guest

Nido: *gasps in amazement* Ish goooood! More!

Although there are some slight spelling errors every now and then, you manage to create a fine picture of what your main characters experiences. You gave us an image of someone that is turned into a toddler, but still thinks as an adult. I really love it; it was worth all the waiting.

P.S.: Is English your main language?

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Wed Oct 21, 2009 2:25 pm

I must have more! I'm loving this.

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Wed Oct 21, 2009 6:09 pm

Hector wrote:: Nido: *gasps in amazement* Ish goooood! More!

Although there are some slight spelling errors every now and then, you manage to create a fine picture of what your main characters experiences. You gave us an image of someone that is turned into a toddler, but still thinks as an adult. I really love it; it was worth all the waiting.

P.S.: Is English your main language?

Thanks! But yes it is

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Sun Feb 07, 2010 11:55 pm

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Mon Feb 08, 2010 1:33 pm

I was laughing until the very end there. I shdder to think what will happen to ya' when you get to that daycare but I'm looking forward to finding out.

Guest

Well, he might just as well meet some familiar furs... or would that be clichéd in this story?
Anyhow, Noah, you totally got my focus on this one. There are only two words to put here to summarize my comment:
1] CUTE!
2] MORE!

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Sun Feb 21, 2010 11:35 pm

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Mon Feb 22, 2010 10:30 am

WHOAH! Talk about your 180's! This was getting so sweet and now you're hooking me in with cliffhangers of perilous foreshadowings! You're so mean but that is incredibly clever. Ri approves.

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Mon Feb 22, 2010 6:06 pm

Hmmm... i've got a theory, but I'll keep it to my self. Very cute story! Let us hope that Him and Tyson get to stay together.

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Mon Feb 22, 2010 7:41 pm

Riolu wrote:: WHOAH! Talk about your 180's! This was getting so sweet and now you're hooking me in with cliffhangers of perilous foreshadowings! You're so mean but that is incredibly clever. Ri approves.

How am I mean? O O oh and Ri is a cute nickname ^ ^

Legandaryhon wrote:: Hmmm... i've got a theory, but I'll keep it to my self. Very cute story! Let us hope that Him and Tyson get to stay together.

What's your theory? *wags tail* Oh and nice to meet you ^ ^

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Mon Feb 22, 2010 7:51 pm

Nice to meet you too!

My theory: I think he's dreaming, and it's about the past he has no knowledge of. But of course, now that I told you, that's probably not going to happen anymore.

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Mon Feb 22, 2010 10:06 pm

It's just mean to leave us with that big of a cliffhanger.

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Mon Feb 22, 2010 11:54 pm

Legandaryhon wrote:: Nice to meet you too!

My theory: I think he's dreaming, and it's about the past he has no knowledge of. But of course, now that I told you, that's probably not going to happen anymore.

*huggles* Well thanks for telling me your idea, I enjoy hearing people's guesses ^ ^ Oh and I'm too stubborn to change my story even if someone guesses correctly or is close =P

Riolu wrote:: It's just mean to leave us with that big of a cliffhanger.

Aww put as a writer you know it makes people wish to read more =P *huggles*

Subject: Re: Fantasy's Perfection Tue Feb 23, 2010 10:28 am

Yeah, as a fellow writter I know how clever that is. *giggles and huggles* Making a cliffhanger the size of Mount Everest goes past clever, into devious and almost into the evil zone though. My character Ri would approve.