Role Playing school. (Learn how to do it here.)

Ok Here it is everybody. Come here and learn the ins and outs of RPing. Well I'll let you take it away now Baby Dio

"Thank you Lig, This is Greatly apreciated."

Well Now everybody, It has come to my atention that most here are quite new to the concept of " A Second Line " Meening making a scentence long enough to have a comma and a full stop.

So here today and any other day if need be I am going to give to you the gift of paragraph Rp's.

Let me start with this........

"Give me an action to seeing your daddy come home after work"

Ok I'll go first.

Balt smiled from his playpen as he saw his dadddy walk through the door. He raised up his hands to be picked up. "Yay! Daddy back!" He said voice full of giggles.

Lig wrote:: Ok I'll go first.

Balt smiled from his playpen as he saw his dadddy walk through the door. He raised up his hands to be picked up. "Yay! Daddy back!" He said voice full of giggles.

Actualy In your first try you've nailed it Lig, all you have to do Is put a comma where you've put the second fullstop and your grammar would be spot on.

See thats a basic Line In Rp but still it gets the point across with feeling than just ( "Daddy!" She yells )

Im Not picking on anyone here, just using an example. For I Love you all and would hate to hurt any of you.

When Having Offered a teat to Kari in the Alien Rp , Kari puts down " Drinks".....

And I think this should be a second point to work on.

"Would anyone else like to work on that point and give a Longer Reply?"

Guest

*cody layed there, bored silent, then he heard it...the screeching of the door, his foxy ears perked and his bushy orange tail waged, he immedialtly Jumped up and ran to the door* "yay Daddy Kirk is back!" he says grasping onto kirks pant leg wraping himself around it tail wagging with a smile spread across his muzzle

(answer no. 2)
*codys tummy grumbeld as he licked his lips, seeing the bottle that his daddy made for him, he wiggle in excitment as kirk came closer with the bottle in hand "alrighty kiddo" kirk said sitting next to him, cody immediatly crawls into kirks lap, forcing kirk to craddle him, then cody opens his mouth wide ready for the bottle. Kirk puts the bottle to codys mouth, who immedialy starts to nurse on the bottle, sputtering a bit, kirk rocks cody as he nurses on the bottle*

"Well Done Kiru!, Thats fantastic your all doing so well!"

"If you keep up at this rate Ill show you Double Action Posts" ^^

Guest

(note i edited for your second quistion mr. dio! *smles in his desk, tail wagging, but trys not to be a teachers pet*)

"Eathers fine.... But if youd let me point out a fault, you used the word bottle a little too often."

Heres My edits: Note how although im refering to the same thing i use Different words to describe it sos not to keep repeting myself.

#1

*Cody layed there apon the floor watching Tv bored as there was nothing on , soon to hear The creak of the door as a tall figure walked threw the opening into the hallway shadowed by the light of the sun behind him. Cody's little foxy ears perked and his bushy orange tail waged as he immedialtly Jumped up and ran to the door to Great this familier face * "YAY! Daddy your home, Kirk Is Home!" "He Meeps and Squeeks in joy, grasping onto Kirks pant leg and usig his tail to letch on tightly with a blissfull Bark of exitment *

#2

*Codys Little tummy grumbeld as he licked his lips in seeing the bottle that his daddy made for him, wiggling in excitment as kirk came closer with the milk in hand* "Alrighty kiddo" Kirk said sitting next to him. Cody immediatly crawls into Kirks lap which ends up with kirk Picking him up to cradle him, leaving Cody with his mouth wide open ready to suckle apon the Bottle teat. Kirk soon puts the bottle to codys mouth and immedialy the younge pup starts to nurse on the bottle, sputtering a bit as he gets a little to exited and chokes apon the milk. Kirk could only rock him soothingly and coo's down to him as he held the container of liquid nourishment to the pups lips and let him take it in as he felt comfortable~

Guest

(*takes notes* "Tank ous teacher!!" *smiles*)

"Yous two are actualy ok at this, Its Kari we need to get in here mostly"

Guest

( T_T )

Kaela Number of posts : 1995 Age : 33 Registration date : 2006-11-05

((i dont think ill do good here im to used to im style rps.))

KiruWeathers wrote:: ( T_T )

Im not talking about you Kiru, your pritty good at this. Im talking about whoever played at the Fem puppy In the Rp.

Guest

(i know...kari's my Girl Friend though, so take a small bit of offence to it...nothing to be worryed on your part)

KiruWeathers wrote:: (i know...kari's my Girl Friend though, so take a small bit of offence to it...nothing to be worryed on your part)

>,< Dude, I am soo Sorry. I had No idea

Guest

its alright

So....... Im a way, Its settled.

Kiru and Lig are rather tallented within Rp's and I realy dont wish to offend anymore.

So Unless anyone needs more help on the matter im rather happy to continue with the Alien Rp.

Please do continue it. I've really gotten to like that RP. I think it one of the most creative ones we've got up.

Number of posts : 159 Registration date : 2006-11-08

if i could give an tip, the usage of paragraphs can be useful at times, i hate having to look at crammed sentences.

""Rinonno glanced into the night sky. She seemed at ease as the moon gleamed back down.

"There's something mystical about a full moon....." she said to her older brother.

"Indeed, there is" Guno said in response.""

The most noted thing about paragraphs,

1. You start a new one with the subject or area changes

2. You start a new one when the speaker changes

Are you asking that I stop my paragraphs? o.O

Meh, its just a small technicality issue thingie. Though it kinda really boils down to personal taste when you're Rping with someone, I guess. Some peoples better at the one liners, an some like to write mini stories an stuff ^^ I know this's probably been all said before, i'm not sure, its too early an I haven't had any coffee >.<
Myself, I know i'd kinda personally get bored with jus writing one liners back an forth, i've tried it, I really have, but I kinda see rionnos' point a bit, some people jus don't really like reading all too much.

Though theres just one little problem that stands out like a sore thumb, some times writing one lined paragraphs like that can take even more skill and effort to do, because things can become boring, hollow, and in the worse case scenario, ..even a little pointless to continue..
But in an un-biased standpoint, theres really no 'wrong' way to Rp, cause as long as you an your friend/ friends are having fun, thats what its all about, right? ^^
Experiment with different styles, practice, an never ever give up. ^^

"The Master Has Spoken"

Number of posts : 4489 Age : 36 Registration date : 2006-11-05

kari smiles at her daddy from the playpen she was in with a soajked diaper* hewwo daddy, mes gwad yas made it home" smiles happily and giggles, holds her arms up to her daddy who had just walked in the door from work

^.^ Very Good Kari , Your Getting to be a Clever Little Pup.

Number of posts : 4489 Age : 36 Registration date : 2006-11-05

i am better at this when i am not in physical pain in rl

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